NAPLAN writing

The Light Kingdom

Once there was a boy. This boy did not have a name. He was a tall dark boy who liked exploring in the wonderful world around him. One day his mother said that they were going to go on a tour through Africa to explore. So the boy went upstairs and packed all his dark black shirts and all of his denim jeans and then came back downstairs. The boy carried all of his big and extremely heavy bags to the car and then they drove all the way to the airport.

They flew for about one day and a half and then they got off the ‘plane and called a taxi and then they drove all the way to the hotel that they were staying at. Then they decided to sleep for a bit. The next day they started their tour of Africa. They had started their tour outside the hotel. They started for the jungle. They had seen lots of animals like the king of the jungle - the lion. Then they asked their driver if they could stop to go to the toilet.

The driver said that they could only stop for about three minutes. So they all got out and then they went to the toilet. The boy heard the driver say that they needed to go but he was not ready and then he heard the car drive off into the dark and mysterious distance. The boy tried to run after the car and then the boy stopped. There was a fork in the road. The boy decided that he would go to the left and look for the car. So he started to run towards the left passage when he saw that there was a hole on the ground with some stairs.

He decided to go down the stairs and see what was down there. He ran down and saw that there was a whole castle down there. He ran towards the big and bright castle to see where he was. He ran as fast as he could and noticed that there were two guards standing next to the door. He asked one of the guards what was the place that he had found was. They said that it was the kingdom of light. The guards said that he could go inside if he liked.

He ran inside and then he heard voices that sounded familiar. He ran down and saw that it was his mum and dad. They said that they were caught when they had gone near there and they were thrown into the jail. The boy tried to pick the lock and free them but a guard that was passing saw him and threw him in jail. He had still got his pin that he was picking the lock with first and then he opened his cell door and then he heard the guard again. He closed the door on his cell and then waited for the guard to get out of sight.

The boy opened his parents’ cell and then was about to run out when he heard even more voices. He turned around and found that all of the other people who where in the jail were people who had been on the tours before. He opened all of their cells and then ran for the stairs back to Africa when he heard a yell behind him. He turned around and noticed that there were guards chasing them. He ran for the stairs and when he got there he saw a button.

When every one was through he pushed the button and then ran up and the hole in the ground started closing. He ran up and then he fell to the ground and noticed that there was a hand on his leg. The hole was nearly closed. He hit the hand off with his leg and then climbed out just in time. His mother said, “Let’s never go on holiday again and now you have a name. I will call you Brave."