Under The Sea

Once there was a small joyous boy that loved swimming. One morning at 10:00am his family decided to go to the beach because they had just won the lottery. The boy was so exited. It was about a boring five hour's there but when it was over they loved the beautiful sandy beach.

The small child saw lots of fantastical and colourful signs saying: Fish Bait, Buy food here. Then on the hot sandy beach was a half buried bottle filled with some strange liquid. He ran up and started digging it out. Then he pulled it out and ran back to his tall family. They all took a bit of it and then decided to go for a swim.

Then he went under water and held his breath as long as he could and then came back up. Then a big sparkling boat coming towards him so he ducked under again but he couldn’t hold it enough so he let go and found out that the liquidly thing they drank must have let them breathe underwater. He swam all the way up and told his family that he could breathe underwater and asked if they would try breathing in the glistening blue crystal water.

They tried and then they could. They decided to swim all day. They saw a dolphin, a clownfish and a shark. Then when they came back up they found out that they could not breathe out of water for very long. So their mum told them that they would be staying in the glistening blue there for ever.

They were swimming for five hours when they found a big sparkling city. They swam in and saw mermaids. They decided to live there the boy heard a voice saying, "Wake up,Wake up." Then the boy woke up and found out that it all was a dream.


Excellent - great writing. Top marks. From Ms S.